(03-08-2014, 10:53 AM)HannahDJA Wrote: If you're not very good at mapping, I'd suggest finding someone to help you out.

The mapping needs work. Whether you sit down to watch tutorials or have someone help you, it needs to be fixed. I watched the video when you're walking through the snow tunnel. As opposed to focusing on scripting, focus first and for-most on the map and its details. Walking through a triangle of snow is not only geography impossible (unless we've managed to develop triangle heat tools that allow us to carve huge triangles into whatever geography we want to under my nose), but it's not very appealing to the eye. Nature is unpredictable, even though we as humans thrive on a sense of predictability in order to stay safe, that doesn't mean predictable nature is interesting. Try making the snow cave a rock cave with a snow floor, or maybe see if there's a way for you to make the walls snow without making them perfectly straight planes.

I like what you did with the computer. Looks like when it's interacted with, you teleport the player to a different spot, however the dialogue would be better with audio, and the subtitles on the bottom so people can actually read them. If you aren't able or don't want to do audio, you can still make the subtitles on the bottom so they can be read.

Also, I've gone through a few pages of this thread and it seems like you're more interested in the story (unless I read wrong) yet you have countless grammatical errors. I understand just writing what you can for speed and testing purposes, but if you're going to focus on story, then maybe a little more care with the grammar couldn't hurt?

I see that you want to release it in May. That's almost 3 months away. I don't know how long your custom story will be, or when exactly you started making it, but any decent custom story shouldn't take 3 months to make, unless you have a team of 50 working on it. Just sayin'. This is your creation! It's your time to stretch and mold your creative juices, so do it right! I've been working on my TC for MONTHS and I STILL don't have a definitive release date! Granted, my project may be bigger than yours, however, that's no excuse for you NOT to put your heart and soul into this! You already seem to have gone to extra lengths to edit some entities like the spider and scripting it hatching from the egg, but make your environment unique to move around in! If you want to bring back Penumbra in a new and interesting way, then go out with a BOOM and do what you can to make it the BEST BRING BACK EVAR!!!

Sorry for this long response, but you seemed so hyped about this, and I know how that is, especially with everybody being critical. The story, despite it's need for a little more back story and intricacy, has potential, so the custom story has potential. Go the extra mile! Take a few extra months! Do your best and utilize what tools you've access to on the forums!

(03-08-2014, 01:24 PM)Badcat5550 Wrote: Just what HanahDJ, HsannhDJA,HannnahDJ, HannahDJA said!!!


GOD I can't spell your name right, sorry :/

Just kidding XD

You can't just make white planes and call it a snow cave!

You must instead make another cave since it might not work out to make a snow cave, and no you don't really need to tell something to help you out with the map detailing or if you want.

The best way is to open your imagination!

That's what happened to me before, I was just doing empty rooms that made no sense, but after playing other custom stories and seeing all the maps and stuff, then I opened my own imagination and made my own maps! to make good looking levels just like mine or anybody else, you mostly want to use decals, and lots of furniture, but remember the level must make sense. and yes slow down and be creative, don't be hyped and be fast! I know that feeling, but if you want to make well made maps, you must be slow and creative, got that?

These are pictures from my levels, the ones that you see are just rooms from different levels!
http://www.mediafire.com/download/4q685dnd3ucdyl6/my+level+images.zip
my level images might help you out into map detailing, I hope

(03-08-2014, 05:22 PM)Lazzer Wrote:

(03-08-2014, 01:24 PM)Badcat5550 Wrote: Just what HanahDJ, HsannhDJA,HannnahDJ, HannahDJA said!!!
GOD I can't spell your name right, sorry :/

Just kidding XD

"GOD I can't spell your name right, sorry :/"

Are you serious? You can copy paste his username.

(03-08-2014, 06:41 PM)Badcat5550 Wrote: It's a Joke XD I knew his name already but I just wanted to be funny, you don't take a joke?

(03-08-2014, 01:24 PM)Badcat5550 Wrote: Just what HanahDJ, HsannhDJA,HannnahDJ, HannahDJA said!!!


GOD I can't spell your name right, sorry :/

Just kidding XD

You can't just make white planes and call it a snow cave!

You must instead make another cave since it might not work out to make a snow cave, and no you don't really need to tell something to help you out with the map detailing or if you want.

The best way is to open your imagination!

That's what happened to me before, I was just doing empty rooms that made no sense, but after playing other custom stories and seeing all the maps and stuff, then I opened my own imagination and made my own maps! to make good looking levels just like mine or anybody else, you mostly want to use decals, and lots of furniture, but remember the level must make sense. and yes slow down and be creative, don't be hyped and be fast! I know that feeling, but if you want to make well made maps, you must be slow and creative, got that?

These are pictures from my levels, the ones that you see are just rooms from different levels!
http://www.mediafire.com/download/4q685dnd3ucdyl6/my+level+images.zip
my level images might help you out into map detailing, I hope