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[FAN FIC] The Gatherer. (AKA Limper the Grunt) - Printable Version +- Frictional Games Forum (read-only) (https://www.frictionalgames.com/forum) +-- Forum: Amnesia: The Dark Descent (https://www.frictionalgames.com/forum/forum-6.html) +--- Forum: General Discussion (https://www.frictionalgames.com/forum/forum-18.html) +--- Thread: [FAN FIC] The Gatherer. (AKA Limper the Grunt) (/thread-14720.html) |
[FAN FIC] The Gatherer. (AKA Limper the Grunt) - kiruclanz - 04-12-2012 This is a story about a servant grunt. Not so scary. Focuses mainly on the grunt, not the human. There are slight edits of the Amnesia canon. As it would be boring if the story was about him only going after one human and not killing a bunch. Chapter 1 - Introduction Spoiler below!
Chapter 2 - The Hunt Begins Spoiler below!
More chapters to come. Tell me what you think. RE: [FAN FIC] The Gatherer. (AKA Limper the Grunt) - Fomzo - 04-12-2012 Are you interested in constructive criticism? RE: [FAN FIC] The Gatherer. (AKA Limper the Grunt) - Damascus Rose - 04-13-2012 Robosprog, "Alexander had tasted power from controlling his workers and their loved ones, but he grew old and couldn't afford to die at any age, however he had studied and stumbled upon a discovery - a substance called Vitae that had the potential to extend his life." This sentence is actually a run-on sentence now, it would be better if there was a stop in the middle. I think adding a period in the middle would help: "Alexander had tasted power from controlling his workers and their loved ones, but he grew old and couldn't afford to die at any age. However, he had studied and stumbled upon a discovery - a substance called Vitae that had the potential to extend his life." |