(07-09-2014, 10:46 AM)CQBgamer Wrote: [video=youtube]http://youtu.be/0SUIc8SuM7U[/video]
I agree. There's a very distinct emptiness to the room. Even if this is the only room you've done so far, I'd work a bit more on it and several other rooms before putting together any sort of promotional material like this, since you're not really showing anything to garner real interest from an audience.
Another nitpick, I'd change the outro song. Many people do watch Markiplier and as soon as I heard that song at the end, I was a bit put off. By the nature of the song and because of the Markiplier connection, most will find the inclusion of it to be.... unncessary or ill-fitting. Having read what you plan to include in the story, it seems EXTREMELY ill-fitting and gives a prospective player the wrong impression of what the game will be about.
Also, I have that audition recorded for you and will be turning it in soon.