Let me get the praise out of the way before addressing some concerns I have. It is incredibly well written even if it has a little mixture between Corpse Bride and The Notebook. The sequencing is planned out well thought, the level design and scripting work really well. And despite all of the possible nasty things I may/may not say it is possibly one of the best custom stories I have ever tried out, going so far as to even call it the third member of my superstar tag team (Dark Room and Through The Portal). Right, now that is out of the way, lets talk about the concerns.
Actually, on second thought, I will only raise one. I don't think a story like this is suitable for an interactive medium, but rather as a short live action/dark 3D film.
My once cent
LHudson