A laugh in the Darkness - Chapter 1

[elxyopo]

Thats Incredible! I Love All Your Stories!

I Love This Story, But i Think You Need To Change Some Things Like: When i'm gettin off the house and all the clowns are going to kill me, in my desperated act for escape of the attack of the clowns, i enter in one of the rooms and i close the door... a clown saw me and he stands in front of the door, but he dont broke it, he just block the door with the body, that made me get trapped in the room! D:

And i think if u want to do a 2nd part, u can allow more jumpscares, but not the jumpscares of sounds or pictures, i mean jumpscares of gentleman jumping and screaming... if u dont know how to put it with the story, u can made it like remembers

Aaah, and the most important, the jumpscares made me scare, but the monsters made me scare a lot more than the jumpscares... u can add more monsters in the story (i dont mean new monsters, i mean put those monsters in the map)

Well, that's all my critics...

I can rate it 8.5/10, the story isnt long but however i love it

Sorry for my bad english, im not so good, im chilean and i speak spanish.... the good thing is i can write ñññññññññññññññññññññññññññññññññññññññññ! hahahahhaha >