Voice actor needed.(adult male)

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Take anything I say with a grain of salt as I'm not a linguist and I don't speak English natively (though English is technically my first language; I lived in the US as a child and so I learned English and Icelandic simultaneously, and have been speaking it on the internet since like 2004 and take a great interest in it [really is one of the most beautiful languages out there]). This is all my opinion on top of that so somebody else may find your performance simply breathtaking. I think my advice is good though. Where are you from by the way?

Oh I doubt if anyone thought it breathtaking at any point.

However, I'm not one to lose my sleep over a bit of criticism. It's good and I've noticed a lot of people I know who are good at English tend to over pronounce every word and try to sound perfect all the time rather than just letting the language flow naturally. I try to keep things relaxed but when you're recording lines you also have to make the words distinguishable. Therein lies the problem.

I'm Finnish and I've never lived abroad.

I share your pain as I speak English with a subtle Icelandic accent (apart from not having an actual regional accent and just a general one) which can be quite annoying but I think it's just a matter of technique. To play an instrument correctly for example you need to do things you are uncomfortable with and the only way to make it sound natural is practice. I'm not a voice actor and I probably suck more than you do but I know sound cause I spend a great deal of time listening to music and listening to people talk and in my opinion some of your line delivery just sounds really outlandish.

One tip I have is relax your throat. Just from listening to it I can hear you tighten your throat and the corners of your mouth when you say "may" when in fact if you want it to sound natural you should let it basically get out uninhibited with an open throat and relaxed facial muscles. Also in words like "nerves" (which really stands out) you really "spit" the word out like you're in a hurry. It's subtle, but I hear a very short glottal stop before the "-erve" sound. If you were to slow it down it would probably sound like *nuh*-rvz which is really unpleasant. Rather voice it in one continuous sound with a steady flow of air like: "nehrvz".

If you apply these two simple concepts to similar words I think you will start to notice a difference. Most important of all listen to other people speak, and listen beyond the words themselves. Really dig into what they are doing with their voices.