(06-14-2012, 11:29 PM)Bridge Wrote: (06-14-2012, 11:24 PM)Mathiasz Wrote: (06-14-2012, 10:41 PM)Bridge Wrote: Sorry dude but I'm not a fan of this one. It's too static (especially the harmony)! Even if the themes were strong (I personally don't think it is, but whatever) you need to do something with them; play with the melody, harmony and rhythm a little.
EDIT: And in my opinion the repeat at 0005 is quite ugly, if you really must have that chord there then at least change the little two note lick that precedes it; it really doesn't sound interesting.
Thanks for the feedback!
Though I think it all fits pretty good.
It's always good with some opinions!
http://soundcloud.com/gylfi-1/the-end-edits-1
I just wrote a variation (also fairly boring, there isn't much to work with to be honest) on your theme just to show you what I mean (volume is kind of low for some reason).
Oh, in that way!
Now I get it, hehe.
Yeah, I am already going to put a lot more work into this piece.
This is basically just the rough version - nothing mastered, EQ'ed or anything.
It's just a shape of how the track is build and is going to be, you know.
Thanks for it anyways!