[WIP] Awake - Mod in progress, need critique

[EddieShoe]

I hope this is the right place to post this, if not I'm sorry! (Note before reading: I was in a hurry so the text might be a little weird, I hope you understand my point at least.)

Anyway, to get to the point. I've just started to work on a Custom Story called "Awake" (I didn't find any other mods called this, just "Wake"). The story in short: It's a bit of a story where you investigate what happened and why you can't remember anything, you wake up next to your bed with a headache. It's pretty much like the original story, you forgot everything.

At the moment the story isn't completed, or the so called "script". But I'm working on it. I've started to work on the first 2 maps, but only the 1st one is over 75% completed. I don't want it to be one of those "hurr durr monsters chasing you everywhere", instead I want scares from the enviroment and focus on the ambience. I can tell you that this has not been so successful so far, but I'm gonna have some maps be more horrific than the others instead and hopefully I'll have the time to remake the first one a bit.

So far I've almost completed the first one, it's called "Test.map", I'll change the name later because at first I didn't expect myself to actually progress this far, but the great community helped me with all the useful tutorials and quick replies on the forum. The map still misses a lot of DECALS and PARTICLES, I wanted to progress quickly so I can polish the big, beautiful details after. Also, the billboards are ugly! Really ugly! But like I said, I wanna make some progress first and polish later. The 2nd map is not even close to complete, I just made it quickly to see how the level doors transition works. For example, the roof's missing in the first room... I was in a real hurry so I had to finish the 2nd room's basic layout.

The same goes for some of the messages and stuff, they may make no sense at all so please remember MOST OF IT WILL BE CHANGED!

Now, what I want from you guys is to try the map and give me some constructive critisism, by that I mean you may tell me "this is not good" instead of "omg it sucks" etc. And if something's bad, tell my why and how I can change it! I realized after reading that people do not like "flying jesus" with the iron maiden sound effect anymore, which I actually had so I replaced it. Most of this can be seen in the .HPS files.

I can't come up with anything else to say at the moment, I know it's a lot of text but I wanna tell you how the situation is before people are like "lol it isn't done" or "wth the 2nd map is like 10 sec long". I just wanna see what the community wants before I progress too far because it's harder to change the maps after.

Here's the link: Awake - by Eddie Shoe

If I got this right, just make a folder called Awake in custom_stories and extract the files there. If it's not starting (it does for me, but you never know...), just tell me and I'll look into it!