[WIP] Awake - Mod in progress, need critique

[EddieShoe]

Oh I see.The boring ol' story beginning.Where am i?What happened?Turns out you have german gay disco in your basement and youre like oh now I remember then you gotta escape the whole place but then one of the gays catch you in the woods and shove it right up the ass and keeps pumping it for eternity.

Or something like that.

Haha, that made me laugh a bit. So, basically what you're saying is that it's a bit cliché? I'll look into that, thanks.

EDIT: Forgot to mention that if you would've read the script you would understand, but I havn't posted it here. I had a great idea but now I realize that it's been used too much, I'll see if I can come up with a new idea.