(09-15-2012, 10:49 PM)failedALIAS Wrote: Wow, I had nearly forgotten what this forum was about. Finally something that has potential, though it may need work in a few areas: it should look more real, as a public place it should have tables, some of them having stacks of books on them. Perhaps a few things could be misplaced, giving it that "used look". Where you can imagine that other people could have been here just hours ago.
Doesn't matter, now that the story is released it's doubtful you'd put any more work into it; I'm just giving my take.
I'm glad you like it! I will take your words, put it inside of my mind and stuff the ideas into chapter 2! Thank you for the response
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