Metal thread \m/

[Adny]

My 10th song

I've noticed you've been asking for opinions/criticism of your works on this thread, so here goes nothin:

Good stuff:
-Good growling (I prefer it over screaming/squealing any day)
-Good lyricism

Not so good stuff:
-Composition of guitar parts; very basic, it feels like all of your riffs stay within the first 5 frets of the instrument. They sound quite homogeneous.
-The drum track sounds like it was made in guitar pro, perhaps you could fine something more realistic?

Advice:
-For composing songs, I'd suggest trying to maintain 2 individual guitar parts (guitar seems to be your forte)
-You can build some very melodic harmonies by using higher-pitched octave chords over a lower rhythmic part
-Try to switch rhythyms; break away from the standard chugging 8th notes in 4/4 time. You could switch time signatures in the middle of the song (To 3/4 for example).
-For picking patterns, again like above, steer clear of the "1 & 2 & 3 & 4 &" stuff. Try learning 3s (e.g. 2 sixteenth notes followed by an eight note, repeating) or galloping. Simple, but effective.

I hope I didn't sound too blunt or rude - just a fellow metal enthusiast lookin' out for ya. Good luck friend.