Just played, and beat this. I have to say that this is a pretty damn well made custom story.
The strongest point of the story I'd have to say is that you successfully pulled off the feel of the game world, or in this case "village". It doesn't feel like static rooms from a video game, to me it really felt somewhat like a believable, structured village. Sure, this may not have been done absolutely perfectly, but it's definitely among the better up there, and the mod's greatest strength.
Another thing I fairly enjoyed was the use of foreshadowing to cause tension. More than once, you allude to something that's happening/happened somewhere that the player is in close proximity to, and/or is likely to visit. It adds a sense of dread knowing that the "thing" the note mentioned is right there.
Then the mod's story. It's a fairly standard story, but I think it was executed well enough. Although I think a bit of the voice acting could've been better in some parts though.
Things that bugged me in the mod though were some slight mapping issues, particularly towards the end. There were quite a lot of stretched textures, and clipping.
All in all though I think this was a blast to play, and jolly good job to you for making it!
8.5/10