[REQUEST] What could I do better in my CS?

[serbusfish]

Despite 'completing' my custom story a while back i'm wanting to update it a bit in an attempt to improve things. So far i've decided to include a monster earlier on as its quite a while before your first true encounter occurs (I should have introduced them much earlier) but i'm not sure what else could be done better.

So, if anyone has time it'd be really appreciated if you could try out the story in its current state and let me know what you liked and didnt like. And of course I will put everyone who provides constructive feedback into the end credits

http://www.moddb.com/mods/escape-from-brackenburg