i need some help

[Darkfire]

No offence, bro, but:
1. You need to figure out some things yourself, experiment. Asking about every single thing will slow you down.
2. You won't make an "good like the amnesia campaign" story when you don't even know the basics. It's good that you have ambition, but don't boast about something that's not even started!
3. "It starts to get RAIN" , "While YOUR in the house". Grammar nazis coming. With that english you're gonna have a bad time.
4. Jumpscares. Not even pointless, but senseless, they have no explanation at all.
5. Nothing really makes sense in this story. My advice: think like you were playing the game for the first time and you don't know what's going on.
6. Have some taste! Some of this map design is really ugly... The mansion is a rectangle.
7. Puzzles are nice, but they don't make sense either.

I'm sorry for being harsh to you. I know what I sound like. But with such CS you're not gonna get better reviews than mine. Again, sorry for being a douche.