What the story needed [SPOILER]

[Jinix]

Well congrats on such a deep analysis of the game. you are a good writer.
I won't pick out the points, but I basically like the game as it is
Other than more "optional" books laying around to read stories that may or not relate to the various locales Egypt, London, Prussia etc., I can find no fault as a gamer worth pointing out.
The only game to scare the daylights outta me before Amnesia are Hammerite related adventures with Garrett in the Thief games.