[DEMO] try out and comment :)

[KonKaizo]

At first, really nice idea, and you played it out right. But i have some notations:

The very first room is a bit strange scripted. I don't know exactly what, but i think you should not force the player to look at the corpse.

Your placement of tinderboxes is strange, too. Maybe you could place them there were you would normally find one. They are not behind cupboards or in front of fallen rocks.

The was also too much walk in my opinion, but i think that does not matter (:

The part with the monster is too obvious i think. When it appeared, i was like WOAHHHHHHHHHHH but seconds after that i knew that it has to be a hallucination. I think it would be much more scary when you could move away from the monster.
Also, i think the part came a bit too early in the storyline. If you shock the player like this so early, it will get very hard to keep the story interinging and scary.

But, all in all, its a great custom story. I like the overall storyline, and the atmosphere is right too. There were some really shocking moments. You just have to work a little bit on your scripts and on the storyline.
The Scenery is really great. Enough entities, enough Decals. I only find the fog room is a bit too bright.

If i should give points it would be like 8/10. :D