Fan-made Amnesia Sequel

[Fomzo]

Whoo hoo! Another addition, and 5 pages long at that!

While reading I do have one question, and I don't mean this in any catty or mean way I swear: do you have anyone proof reading your stories before you post them here on the forums? If you don't already you should think about getting a close friend to give their insight on the stories, since people can add ideas and suggestions you alone might not have thought of (plus the bright side of having a friend do it makes criticism easier to take than only having strangers do so). I only ask because though I find these stories good I feel it could be even better! Then again if you're just writing these for fun and not trying to be super serious I really wouldn't pay attention to what I've just said, ha ha! As long as you're enjoying what you're doing, right?

Ugh, I type too much on this thread I swear. Either way I'm excited to see the next part, good luck!

PS: I'm going to admit I laughed a little when one of the characters introduced was named 'Fabio'. I'm so mature

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Yes I have someone proofreading my stories, just look at Post #3.
I enjoy doing this and take it quite seriously so if any of you has suggestions I'll be glad to know.
GLAD YOU LIKED IT!
THIS IS JUST THE BEGINNING!