The Machine

[Alex Ros]

The idea itself of a machine possessed by a demon is quite nice. It reminded me Stephen King's "the Mangler" short story idea, no matter if you know it or not. But I have to say that you sold the whole intrigue too early. I can explain that a little bit. At first you're telling me the story in such a way, that I think and imagine some kind of a steam-machine-robot. And as a player I presume that I'll have to turn down that machine. As a result it's a BIG turning point, when you're telling me, that everything is not about some kind of a steam-machine-robot, but all is about a f**king demon. You have to make that turning point extremely unexpected. Now it's not. Now you're selling me that at the Laboratory. First, too early. Second, not the best way to make a turning point through the note.

Another bad thing is the rhythm of the development of the story. Proportionally the time I spent here and there (I mean different levels) is not well-thought-out. For example, proportionally the time the player spends at the Laboratory is a lot shorter than it should be. That's the first place where I meet my enemy directly, but the time I spent on a new type of gameplay was just about a minute. And contrary the time I spent on expectations at previous levels and puzzles was something about an hour. It's incorrect proportions. And there's a lot of such a rhythmical mistakes.

Anyway, besides some critics, your CS is really enjoyable. And that's what is most important. It's a good CS, it's not a bad or stupid one. It's just a little bit sad that it could be a lot better I hope you will understand that I'm giving all these critics only because in general I did love your CS. So don't get me wrong. My congrats! Generally you got your win. Really. And thanks for your efforts, because I got my enjoyment