Last Whisper

[Sabokizi]

Can i use the endtheme for my custom story?

Sure, go ahead

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I am sorry but when you say great story you are flat out lying. I am not trying to bash here, just to give you some constructive criticism. In the description it says you are in a cave in ireland, then you start out in a prison (or similar). That makes no sense. However, that I can get over.

You start out with a monster chase, which doesn't give the player any chance to get immersed. Maybe try starting out with the player arriving at the cave, going through the cave and ending up in the prison. Then it might work better.

Also the random messages like "derp" and especially "HULK SMASH!!!" aren't really funny, and just plain take away any sense of story and immersion there was in the first place.

Puzzles were pretty cool, and I like that there was a lot to explore, but maybe work on atmosphere a little more next time.

Yes, I am already creating the beginning cause I know it doesnt make any sense, but anyway... that was only the first part so its not even done yet.