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RE: Need a title for my story pls? - The chaser - 08-24-2014

Silent Night? Nocturnal research? The Barn's secrets? Moon's gift?

RE: Need a title for my story pls? - i3670 - 08-24-2014

(08-24-2014, 12:56 AM)Romulat✪r (✿◠‿◠) Wrote:
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Not a title, but here's a fix up of your errors, some spelling related, some punctual and some grammatical. I have tried to keep it in your style of text though.



Do over! You missed quite a few grammatical errors related to time.

RE: Need a title for my story pls? - Romulator - 08-24-2014

(08-24-2014, 01:07 AM)i3670 Wrote: Do over! You missed quite a few grammatical errors related to time.

Yeah, I assume you mean the tenses. Based on the way it was written, I can assume badcat's native language is not English or he just hasn't had a large amount of exposure to sentence composition.

The tenses can be fixed generally by changing a few words in each sentence. I simply fixed most of the more noticeable errors and addressed the tenses at one point:

Quote: It seems like English is not your main language. That's okay though. Every now and then, the tenses of your words change. The opening is in present tense, and the second paragraph is in past. It's not a big problem, but it does become a bit of a jumble.

It's not a big problem in translating, as it is understandable that there are times when the tense will change - most languages use one word for every tense. It becomes an issue when English is your native language and most of the dialogue is formal.

Not trying to argue too much, but that's how I have understood it.

RE: Need a title for my story pls? - Radical Batz - 08-24-2014

(08-24-2014, 01:01 AM)The chaser Wrote: Silent Night? Nocturnal research? The Barn's secrets? Moon's gift?

Thank you Chaser "The Barn's secrets" That's a good one Smile

Won't forget to put you on the credits if you want to lol

RE: Need a title for my story pls? - The chaser - 08-24-2014

Well actually searching names was way more to have fun than to help, but well, if you want add me Big Grin