Here is my revieuw: FOR A FIRST STORY*
This wasn't even that bad for a first story.."playtime 5 minutes MAX"
didnt see any glitches { didnt really looked for it tho }
The mapping part is good.
but... naked flying guys again?? so old..
also some of the maps are like 10 seconds { size of running from startLEVELdoor -> nextroomLEVEdoor }
Try to make the maps bigger and give it more natural lights { pointlights - boxlight! }
the scripts are ok, even tho there are a really small amounth of it.
REMOVE flying naked guys please!
hehhee..
The rooms\hallways are empty - fill them with stuff\entities etc..
ohh : outside trees : make them NOT COLLIDE! and just place blockboxes around them,
it will make the charactor fall trough the map. or people can easely cheat and run over the trees\houses etc..
I kow it is kinda hard to do for your first couple of attemts, but this is only a couple of ideas and hints!
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Overall.. ok -> cause your first story!
try make more complex scripts and try to learn what they really do!
Here is a link that might help you out :
http://frictionalgames.com/forum/thread-7085.html
CLICK ont he "SPOILER"
Keep up the work and you might make something awesome!
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