Where am I? -- My first custom story, pls play!

[Wolfpa]

I worked on this like week or 2 and I would loved to see someone playing it,
yes it is kinda short but cmon its my first one.

http://www.mediafire.com/?y851ola18vw9y03

[LHudson]

Be warned, when I start playing, there will be a video review of it :3

I'll put some feedback on here as well as a link.

[DnALANGE]

Here is my revieuw: FOR A FIRST STORY*
This wasn't even that bad for a first story.."playtime 5 minutes MAX"
didnt see any glitches { didnt really looked for it tho }
The mapping part is good.
but... naked flying guys again?? so old..
also some of the maps are like 10 seconds { size of running from startLEVELdoor -> nextroomLEVEdoor }
Try to make the maps bigger and give it more natural lights { pointlights - boxlight! }
the scripts are ok, even tho there are a really small amounth of it.
REMOVE flying naked guys please! hehhee..
The rooms\hallways are empty - fill them with stuff\entities etc..
ohh : outside trees : make them NOT COLLIDE! and just place blockboxes around them,
it will make the charactor fall trough the map. or people can easely cheat and run over the trees\houses etc..
I kow it is kinda hard to do for your first couple of attemts, but this is only a couple of ideas and hints!
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Overall.. ok -> cause your first story!
try make more complex scripts and try to learn what they really do!
Here is a link that might help you out : http://frictionalgames.com/forum/thread-7085.html
CLICK ont he "SPOILER"
Keep up the work and you might make something awesome!
Overall

[PutraenusAlivius]

Here is my revieuw: FOR A FIRST STORY*
This wasn't even that bad for a first story.."playtime 5 minutes MAX"
didnt see any glitches { didnt really looked for it tho }
The mapping part is good.
but... naked flying guys again?? so old..
also some of the maps are like 10 seconds { size of running from startLEVELdoor -> nextroomLEVEdoor }
Try to make the maps bigger and give it more natural lights { pointlights - boxlight! }
the scripts are ok, even tho there are a really small amounth of it.
REMOVE flying naked guys please! hehhee..
The rooms\hallways are empty - fill them with stuff\entities etc..
ohh : outside trees : make them NOT COLLIDE! and just place blockboxes around them,
it will make the charactor fall trough the map. or people can easely cheat and run over the trees\houses etc..
I kow it is kinda hard to do for your first couple of attemts, but this is only a couple of ideas and hints!
-
Overall.. ok -> cause your first story!
try make more complex scripts and try to learn what they really do!
Here is a link that might help you out : [url]http://frictionalgames.com/forum/thread-7085.html[/url]
CLICK ont he "SPOILER"
Keep up the work and you might make something awesome!
Overall

This page is much, much better.

[DnALANGE]

Here is my revieuw: FOR A FIRST STORY*
This wasn't even that bad for a first story.."playtime 5 minutes MAX"
didnt see any glitches { didnt really looked for it tho }
The mapping part is good.
but... naked flying guys again?? so old..
also some of the maps are like 10 seconds { size of running from startLEVELdoor -> nextroomLEVEdoor }
Try to make the maps bigger and give it more natural lights { pointlights - boxlight! }
the scripts are ok, even tho there are a really small amounth of it.
REMOVE flying naked guys please! hehhee..
The rooms\hallways are empty - fill them with stuff\entities etc..
ohh : outside trees : make them NOT COLLIDE! and just place blockboxes around them,
it will make the charactor fall trough the map. or people can easely cheat and run over the trees\houses etc..
I kow it is kinda hard to do for your first couple of attemts, but this is only a couple of ideas and hints!
-
Overall.. ok -> cause your first story!
try make more complex scripts and try to learn what they really do!
Here is a link that might help you out : [url]http://frictionalgames.com/forum/thread-7085.html[/url]
CLICK ont he "SPOILER"
Keep up the work and you might make something awesome!
Overall

This page is much, much better.

Okay,
Thanks, i have been using this all along
USE JustAnotherPlayer's link if you prefer that,
i liked mine more, cause more explanation what does what.

[Slanderous]

Really nice story, like it but as DnALANGE said it's very short.
Level design is really good. 7/10

[CyrustheVirus73]

A couple of things.

First. You did really good with the bridge key puzzle, took me a few minutes find the key.

Second. You should fix the ending where you pry the front door open and it cuts to the credits, the sound of the door opening keeps looping.

Other than that, it was pretty good. Maybe you could of added a Grunt wandering around in the beginning, but all in all it was a good 1st custom story.