[FAN FIC] The Gatherer. (AKA Limper the Grunt)

[Damascus Rose]

Robosprog,

"Alexander had tasted power from controlling his workers and their loved
ones, but he grew old and couldn't afford to die at any age, however he
had studied and stumbled upon a discovery - a substance called Vitae
that had the potential to extend his life."

This sentence is actually a run-on sentence now, it would be better if there was a stop in the middle. I think adding a period in the middle would help:

"Alexander had tasted power from controlling his workers and their loved
ones, but he grew old and couldn't afford to die at any age. However, he
had studied and stumbled upon a discovery - a substance called Vitae
that had the potential to extend his life."