Custom story idea-Insanity

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Hm... I admire the effort you put into this story, but I don't believe many people would want to make someone elses story. Most are occupied with their own ideas...maybe you could start a team instead or join one that needs a story writer?

Also some (hopefully constructive!) criticism:
I dunno...this whole "experimenting on your best friend" - thing doesn't make much sense to me. And apart from the fact that Alexanders motivation is quite flimsy (Sacrificing your best friend just for science? And how would he ever publish his findings anyway without having people inquire about the test subject?), the whole emotional side of the story wouldn't really come across.

In order for the player to feel as betrayed as it would be logical for the character, you would first need to establish the friendship to Alexander. This however never happens, you basically just tell him "That's your best friend and he has betrayed you now for his personal gain." There is no emotional plot twist to be had, because Alexander already feels like the bad guy from the very beginning and the player only has your word that he used to be his best friend... if you know what I mean