[SPOILER] Need a title for my story pls?

[Romulator]

Do over! You missed quite a few grammatical errors related to time.

Yeah, I assume you mean the tenses. Based on the way it was written, I can assume badcat's native language is not English or he just hasn't had a large amount of exposure to sentence composition.

The tenses can be fixed generally by changing a few words in each sentence. I simply fixed most of the more noticeable errors and addressed the tenses at one point:

It seems like English is not your main language. That's okay though. Every now and then, the tenses of your words change. The opening is in present tense, and the second paragraph is in past. It's not a big problem, but it does become a bit of a jumble.

It's not a big problem in translating, as it is understandable that there are times when the tense will change - most languages use one word for every tense. It becomes an issue when English is your native language and most of the dialogue is formal.

Not trying to argue too much, but that's how I have understood it.