I really liked the second part of the map. It wasn't the "usual" stuff. I am always so scared from monsters... I play the game for months now and I get panic each time I even HEAR a monster. This one made a good twist. I loved the dynamic of the last part. It was actually really funny - but in a very good way.
And I feel absolutely the same about exploring. I miss that in many other stories. As written here:
http://www.frictionalgames.com/forum/thread-12682.html
Your had much of what I had in mind and so I am happy I found it.
Not to mention that your backstory was very interesting. I'd love to see some kind of interaction in the continuation.
To explain that lemme do this in a spoiler:
Of course these are just ideas... I do not wanna override your ideas and I have no idea if what I wish would be even possible with the engine.
About my first question again:
Anyway thanks again for this story. I had much fun with it.
I'll keep an eye for all your updates.
And of course I rated the thread as well.