[Part1] Tri-Orb

**naseem142** · 10-31-2012, 08:07 PM

A few weeks ago i have started creating an amnesia custom story "Tri Orb" , and i'm finished with part 1.
And i might work on the next parts if i get some free time and motivation Wink

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I want you'r opinion on how good it is , script , mapping , scares , etc ..
Please don't be mean if you don't like it just say nicely and honestly so i can improve my next custom stories Smile

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It is my first map , so it won't be professional as the other custom stories in here Confused

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Anyways..

Download Link: [url]http://www.mediafire.com/?23kgdm9r7xbeh5u[/url]

Pictures:

Click me!
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Click me too!

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**Statyk** · 10-31-2012, 08:56 PM

I tried fixing your image links to provide pictures in case you're wondering why the format is different. for some reason, this thread is reading that you have 3 extra images somewhere in the post... So only one can be show, not all three. Odd.

**naseem142** · 10-31-2012, 09:24 PM

(10-31-2012, 08:56 PM)Statyk Wrote: I tried fixing your image links to provide pictures in case you're wondering why the format is different. for some reason, this thread is reading that you have 3 extra images somewhere in the post... So only one can be show, not all three. Odd.

thank you

~~DnALANGE~~ · 10-31-2012, 10:15 PM

Gonna check your cs in a bit.
comments will be added after..
Lange

**HumiliatioN** · 10-31-2012, 11:42 PM

(10-31-2012, 10:15 PM)dnalange Wrote: Gonna check your cs in a bit.
comments will be added after..
Lange

Umm.. I have one question Lange? Is it so necessary to put that "Lange" every reply when you respond?
Just asking.

~~DnALANGE~~ · 11-01-2012, 12:53 AM

OK.. Finished it..
Looks OK for me.
Scripting are simpel but your first CS so also alright!
Mapping.... also looking OK..

Spoiler below!

NOT OK = i had like 4 things is my inventory when i finished...
Things were i guess...
1= 2 orbs
2= a key
3= carbon thing?
and oh.. Don't put YOU: ....text....
Looks really odd to me.. Looks like someone's talking to you..
Overall rate : 6½ - 10
Try to build some more rooms\details\bigger scripts.
I know it takes a LOOOT of time but it will be worth it.

**naseem142** · 11-01-2012, 06:08 AM

(11-01-2012, 12:53 AM)dnalange Wrote: OK.. Finished it..
Looks OK for me.
Scripting are simpel but your first CS so also alright!
Mapping.... also looking OK..

Spoiler below!

Scares were fine but try not to make poofers

NOT OK = i had like 4 things is my inventory when i finished...
Things were i guess...
1= 2 orbs
2= a key
3= carbon thing?
and oh.. Don't put YOU: ....text....
Looks really odd to me.. Looks like someone's talking to you..
Overall rate : 6½ - 10
Try to build some more rooms\details\bigger scripts.
I know it takes a LOOOT of time but it will be worth it.

I know , i just started making custom stories. But i hope that i will improve in the next one.
Also thanks for feedback Shy

**The chaser** · 11-01-2012, 10:51 PM

I'm still playing, and:

-By the moment it's ok.
-But, there are some level fails that destroyed the story. You seem to forget to put ceilings in certain areas.

By the moment, a 7. I will tell you when I finish it Big Grin

Spoiler below!

**naseem142** · 11-06-2012, 05:17 PM

(11-01-2012, 10:51 PM)The chaser Wrote: I'm still playing, and:

-By the moment it's ok.
-But, there are some level fails that destroyed the story. You seem to forget to put ceilings in certain areas.

By the moment, a 7. I will tell you when I finish it

Spoiler below!

When I pressed the three buttons, I told myself: I've helped in that!

Lol i played it again , and it's really embarrassing.. :I

EDIT: I'm working on a new CS , i don't want this CS anymore.
The new one will have more quality and scarier and voice acting.

Or should i continue on this one?

**The chaser** · 11-06-2012, 10:11 PM

(11-06-2012, 05:17 PM)naseem142 Wrote:
(11-01-2012, 10:51 PM)The chaser Wrote: I'm still playing, and:

-By the moment it's ok.
-But, there are some level fails that destroyed the story. You seem to forget to put ceilings in certain areas.

By the moment, a 7. I will tell you when I finish it

Spoiler below!

When I pressed the three buttons, I told myself: I've helped in that!

Lol i played it again , and it's really embarrassing.. :I

EDIT: I'm working on a new CS , i don't want this CS anymore.
The new one will have more quality and scarier and voice acting.

Or should i continue on this one?

Hell, continue it. It's not good to have an story interrumpted.