Some Test Needed.

[Red]

Long time ago, in far away galaxy, i started a custom story which is still a little unfinished, needs some testers and opinions from you guys.
I've been a little um.... busy with something, so i haven't had any time & motive on making this story lately. YOU can affect it positively or negatively.

And remember, i don't belong to englishman or other english speaking human species so there can be some grammatical mess.

The project is based on this invidual story.

No dowload link anymore, i've made my mind, ignore this thread if it's possible.

[DnALANGE]

Downloading.
let's see what this is.
Back with a revieuw when finished.

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Uh.. already stuck at the very first map....
Looking into the scripts and map then.....
The windows seem to have some interaction.. only nothing happens?
And , if you jump at the collapsed wall you can see trough on top, then you see your billboards \ start tekst...

[DnALANGE]

Im back..
I was like O M G! what an amazing story.
UNTILL.. i have reached that 4 way teleports... i was like noooo! whyy,,?
The maps were Amnesia worthy! such a nice mapping man!
Then those jumping teleport.. reached the end... nothing there...?
Then there is another teleport that is BLACK and can't walk...
There goes my OMG.. into.. wtf...
Too bad you did those kinda things with the jmping and teleports..
Fix the bugs and grammers then i will retry!
For now, this in not playable ( for me MFP patch maybe..? )

[Red]

Im back..
I was like O M G! what an amazing story.
UNTILL.. i have reached that 4 way teleports... i was like noooo! whyy,,?
The maps were Amnesia worthy! such a nice mapping man!
Then those jumping teleport.. reached the end... nothing there...?
Then there is another teleport that is BLACK and can't walk...
There goes my OMG.. into.. wtf...
Too bad you did those kinda things with the jmping and teleports..
Fix the bugs and grammers then i will retry!
For now, this in not playable ( for me MFP patch maybe..? )

Yep, i said it's unfinished. Purple and Blue portals are working but unfinished.
But did you get anything about the plot? It's meaning and all?

I might be adding aamfp assests, but i have run into problems with them, so the implementing is under consideration.

[DnALANGE]

Im back..
I was like O M G! what an amazing story.
UNTILL.. i have reached that 4 way teleports... i was like noooo! whyy,,?
The maps were Amnesia worthy! such a nice mapping man!
Then those jumping teleport.. reached the end... nothing there...?
Then there is another teleport that is BLACK and can't walk...
There goes my OMG.. into.. wtf...
Too bad you did those kinda things with the jmping and teleports..
Fix the bugs and grammers then i will retry!
For now, this in not playable ( for me MFP patch maybe..? )

Yep, i said it's unfinished. Purple and Blue portals are working but unfinished.
But did you get anything about the plot? It's meaning and all?

I don;t read notes anymore..
Just bore me too much!
I just want gameplay, and the 2 teleports i went into didnt work
if i were you, .. remove the downloadlink, and make it work!
THis is frustrating for people.
What you can do, is make a small demo of the very first 2 maps.. then end it.
That would give away what you can!

[Red]

Im back..
I was like O M G! what an amazing story.
UNTILL.. i have reached that 4 way teleports... i was like noooo! whyy,,?
The maps were Amnesia worthy! such a nice mapping man!
Then those jumping teleport.. reached the end... nothing there...?
Then there is another teleport that is BLACK and can't walk...
There goes my OMG.. into.. wtf...
Too bad you did those kinda things with the jmping and teleports..
Fix the bugs and grammers then i will retry!
For now, this in not playable ( for me MFP patch maybe..? )

Yep, i said it's unfinished. Purple and Blue portals are working but unfinished.
But did you get anything about the plot? It's meaning and all?

I don;t read notes anymore..
Just bore me too much!
I just want gameplay, and the 2 teleports i went into didnt work
if i were you, .. remove the downloadlink, and make it work!
THis is frustrating for people.
What you can do, is make a small demo of the very first 2 maps.. then end it.
That would give away what you can!

I've put so much effort into writing it! I thought it would be something more unique compared to what we have here.
But good i've straingthended out that making this story is worthy.
Now i just have to continue the long project.

[Mudbill]

If you're gonna present a story you're proud of, I recommend doing it in a more interactive way. People who've played Amnesia stories for a while do get kinda tired of notes. If the whole story consists of them, they could miss it all.

Once you're closing up to finishing the project, I recommend perhaps trying to get some voice actors to make the story more interesting to check out. If the story is just an optional detail the players can look at, then many will miss it.

So yeah, try to present the story in a way that captures the players attention. This is particularly important in the beginning, because I'm sure you know how big of a deal first impressions make.

Good luck!

[Red]

If you're gonna present a story you're proud of, I recommend doing it in a more interactive way. People who've played Amnesia stories for a while do get kinda tired of notes. If the whole story consists of them, they could miss it all.

Once you're closing up to finishing the project, I recommend perhaps trying to get some voice actors to make the story more interesting to check out. If the story is just an optional detail the players can look at, then many will miss it.

So yeah, try to present the story in a way that captures the players attention. This is particularly important in the beginning, because I'm sure you know how big of a deal first impressions make.

Good luck!

Indeed. People are tired of reading notes, good example aamfp and voice acting wouldn't hurt. I'll consider it. Thanks for the advice.