(12-31-2012, 12:41 PM)Unearthlybrutal Wrote: My 10th song
I've noticed you've been asking for opinions/criticism of your works on this thread, so here goes nothin:
Good stuff:
-Good growling (I prefer it over screaming/squealing any day)
-Good lyricism
Not so good stuff:
-Composition of guitar parts; very basic, it feels like all of your riffs stay within the first 5 frets of the instrument. They sound quite homogeneous.
-The drum track sounds like it was made in guitar pro, perhaps you could fine something more realistic?
Advice:
-For composing songs, I'd suggest trying to maintain 2 individual guitar parts (guitar seems to be your forte)
-You can build some very melodic harmonies by using higher-pitched octave chords over a lower rhythmic part
-Try to switch rhythyms; break away from the standard chugging 8th notes in 4/4 time. You could switch time signatures in the middle of the song (To 3/4 for example).
-For picking patterns, again like above, steer clear of the "1 & 2 & 3 & 4 &" stuff. Try learning 3s (e.g. 2 sixteenth notes followed by an eight note, repeating) or galloping. Simple, but effective.
I hope I didn't sound too blunt or rude - just a fellow metal enthusiast lookin' out for ya. Good luck friend.
I've noticed you've been asking for opinions/criticism of your works on this thread, so here goes nothin:
Good stuff:
-Good growling (I prefer it over screaming/squealing any day)
-Good lyricism
Not so good stuff:
-Composition of guitar parts; very basic, it feels like all of your riffs stay within the first 5 frets of the instrument. They sound quite homogeneous.
-The drum track sounds like it was made in guitar pro, perhaps you could fine something more realistic?
Advice:
-For composing songs, I'd suggest trying to maintain 2 individual guitar parts (guitar seems to be your forte)
-You can build some very melodic harmonies by using higher-pitched octave chords over a lower rhythmic part
-Try to switch rhythyms; break away from the standard chugging 8th notes in 4/4 time. You could switch time signatures in the middle of the song (To 3/4 for example).
-For picking patterns, again like above, steer clear of the "1 & 2 & 3 & 4 &" stuff. Try learning 3s (e.g. 2 sixteenth notes followed by an eight note, repeating) or galloping. Simple, but effective.
I hope I didn't sound too blunt or rude - just a fellow metal enthusiast lookin' out for ya. Good luck friend.
Thanks for your opinions and advises
I'll try to make more "harrowing" or "heavier" sounding drum tracks.
I thought that I would record the sounds from my brothers drum kit and use them in "drum machine". But that is just a thought atm.
I'm probably going to make 2 or 3 more songs for this album and test some things out of the same time. After that, I planned to make a single in which I'm really going to make things sound good.
Quote:-Composition of guitar parts; very basic, it feels like all of your riffs stay within the first 5 frets of the instrument. They sound quite homogeneous.
Some parts are easier to play (using mostly power chords for rhythm) so I can focus on growling at the same time I'm playing the guitar (It's quite hard to try to focus on several things at the same time (for example on stage)). I'm going to avoid that in the future.
Quote:I hope I didn't sound too blunt or rude
I'm asking the feedback so I can learn something from it, so you didn't sound too blunt or rude