Well, I played through this, but unfortunatly I was cut short due to a bug in your story, which I'll explain in this spoiler
Though, let me give you some constructive criticism in this; I'll post the downs & boosts to your custom story.
Boosts;
- I enjoyed the dark vibe this story gave off. The foggy areas, and the dark areas.
- I enjoy the fact that you only have music at key points because without the music, your whole imagination is at work; their is no music to tell you if you're safe or not i.e ambient music / creepy music.
- I liked the scares. For example;
Now the downs;
- Their are a tonne of bugs. Such as the one I said in the first spoiler; it rather disappointed me. Their are also some parts of the map where you can get on top of when you're not supposed too and get out of the map itself.
- This one is picky; I dislike that some doors and areas are unnamed. Like the nameless keys, ect ect.
- The story was hard to understand. I really didn't see much of a story, or that's just me being blind to the story & just going through the scares.
Other than these; I'd say the boosts outweigh the downs. I enjoyed the eerie feeling your story gave off. Keep up the good work :D