Quick demo. Check those damn values. The left one is a lot brighter and even it is not that easy to read.
There is no thought about composition. Atleast use the rule of thirds when you take a screenshot.
If you put a black image into your Moddb page or something when you are releasing your story its not gonna get much attention.
Complete darkness in an environment is not scary or unsettling. Try using many light sources but which cover short ranges and have a lot of darkness in between them. What was with that barely reading lamp on the right? Make it light stuff, make the scene interesting.