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		| DragonStar325   Junior Member
 
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				This is my Amnesia CS title it is currently in development     Amnesia Title2.jpg  (Size: 193.72 KB / Downloads: 355)
			
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		| Wapez   Senior Member
 
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				 (07-22-2014, 11:50 PM)DragonStar325 Wrote:  This is my Amnesia CS title it is currently in development  
Mad paint skills.
			 
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		| Slanderous   Posting Freak
 
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				Another one from my upcoming, unannounced story    ![[Image: VgySfzp.jpg]](http://i.imgur.com/VgySfzp.jpg)  |  |  
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		| Slanderous   Posting Freak
 
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				 (07-24-2014, 12:15 AM)Robosprog Wrote:  Nice to see some orange/yellow to blue contrast again, however, there are a few issues!
 First of all, the torches on the pillar don't cast as much light as they should. Use a dim orange pointlight on the area around it - I'd suggest a high alpha on the lights as well.
 The candles should illuminate more of the actual floor on the ground, and the windows at the top should illuminate more as well.
 
 Generally, what light you have just isn't enough, and doesn't fade out well enough.
 Also, from what I -can- see of the walls, they're all the same and need welders on the seams between the walls, which seems to be a reoccurring problem with your screenies. They're also very boring, there's no detail on them. More detail all around would be good.
 
Thanks for your tips! I already started fixing some things, here is how it looks like so far:
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		| Slanderous   Posting Freak
 
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				Allrighty, final version.  ![[Image: 16kv8z.png]](http://i59.tinypic.com/16kv8z.png)  |  |  
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		| Slanderous   Posting Freak
 
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				First of all, your maps are huge ass and they lack a lot of details, dude. Besides, I can see some potential. You should focus more on making kinda smaller, but nicer detailed maps imho. 
Oh and by the way, a map I'm doing for Neelke. I think it kinda lacks something, but what I don't know.
				
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		| Kurton   Senior Member
 
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				 (07-29-2014, 09:39 PM)Lazzer. Wrote:  Oh and by the way, a map I'm doing for Neelke. I think it kinda lacks something, but what I don't know.
 
 
Is that lava down there? If so, it should be a lot brighter and possibly emitting menacing plumes of smoke and fire    I'd also suggest to add some variation to the elevation of each levitating stone, as right now I can't help but feel like they're detailing some floor that isn't there. The ceiling could use a similar treatment, it's pretty flat as is.
			 
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		| Slanderous   Posting Freak
 
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				 (07-29-2014, 10:37 PM)Kurton Wrote:   (07-29-2014, 09:39 PM)Lazzer. Wrote:  Oh and by the way, a map I'm doing for Neelke. I think it kinda lacks something, but what I don't know.
 
 Is that lava down there? If so, it should be a lot brighter and possibly emitting menacing plumes of smoke and fire
  I'd also suggest to add some variation to the elevation of each levitating stone, as right now I can't help but feel like they're detailing some floor that isn't there. The ceiling could use a similar treatment, it's pretty flat as is. 
Indeed, it's lava. It's brighter in-game already, beleive me, it's just bit darker here when I uploaded it. Thanks for your tips though!
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		| victorkim890(KimmyChimmy)   Senior Member
 
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				my first map for my cs but i walked through my map really slow on accident
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