Custom Story: DraKerZz's House [FULL]

[DraKerZz97]

This custom story is made by me and i would really like if u guys plays it. Tell me about it!

http://www.mediafire.com/?o96140kgls3n633

Sorry for all these stupid links, but this one is the ful version latest updates... And yeah thats it

[Red]

I will play it throught and review. (if that does not harm you) .

[amitc1612]

how to install it??

[DraKerZz97]

how to install it??

just drag the file from the zip file to "amnesia the dark descent/redist/custom_stories"

drag the file there thats inside of the zip

[Obliviator27]

New custom story released, means new review from me. Huzzah. As usual, I intend to document my progress as I go along, and what I think as I play.
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Spoiler below!

- No map_caches. Good start.
- Grammar nazi brain exploding.
- Story premise is fairly basic.
- Common error, you just use the lamp entities to generate light.
- Welders between cellarbase. <3
- Your key was a pain to find, but it was found.
- Having the Brute show up just then was kind of cheap, as that's the only way forward.
- Your cellarbase in the area after the Brute doesn't have welders.
- If english is your first language, shame on you.
- Did you really just.....*sigh* Throwing corpses isn't scary, nor is it original.
- ...What? Nice ass?
- Oh. Armor. Hi.
- Who in the world is Mola?
- Missing welders.....gahh.
- Opening the trapdoor reveals....floor?
- Ooookay. Pulling all of the levers does the iron maiden sound. Why?
- Put the gear in place. Another corpse? Really?
- Yeah....not going to search all of these, especially since there's no boxlight, and I have no oil. Just going to open it in the level editor.
- Yet another corpse.
- To the next map.
- Key-door puzzles work...but try to avoid using them all the time.
- Wait...I came from upstairs....went downstairs....and ended up back upstairs?
- Another corpse.
- Time to go down the hatch. Surprising that the key wasn't there before, nor did this hatch lead anywhere.
- Evidently upsized Iron Maiden. Something's coming from that.
- Whoop, Suitor behind me. Didn't expect that.
- Ran down the hallway, and slaughtered by a Brute. Drat.
- Key to freedom. Excellent.
- I....what.

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Don't mean to bash this one too hard...but it's not very good. Though I didn't find any clipping, the mapping wasn't superb, lighting wasn't great at all. All of the "scares" involved monsters, armor, or teleporting naked guys. There was very little story, and the grammar issues was incredibly anti-immersive. Your ending was...well, to be honest, kind of lame. I don't mean to discourage you from continuing creating custom stories, but as long as you improve, we'll be fine.

[HumiliatioN]

Hmh. Finished it and my short review:

Spoiler below!

Starting was really good, but when I entered second map that's pretty much it, cheap scares, rushed mapping surprised I'm not seeing any overlapping textures, but anyways you really must work your next story these things:

- Lighting (use boxlights)
- Better scares (not cheap)
- Key to the door and key to the another door searching it many hours puzzles get's really annoying
- Suprising monsters (not good) build terrifying feeling and atmosphere (less cheap scares or not at all)

Just trying to help

[DraKerZz97]

Thnx for trying to help.

And i am not english and i suck at making notes, i really need a comrate for doing an another more seriously custom story.

[Dewi]

Their feedback is meant to help you, not to insult you.

I'm sure everyone got bad feedback once! Just make use of it and improve on the things they mentioned!

[Dark Knight]

damn, stuck in Library (third map)

Spoiler below!

found note near chair - that key beneath the book! but where Exactly? i search everything, nothing.
is it on the first floor or on second floor?
very hard to find.

[Red]

the review:

Spoiler below!

+ Some events scared me (like those teleporting naked guys)
+That machine worked
-bad mapping
-no lighting (only some lamps)
-thin story
-lazy puzzles

i give you 2 out 5

this wasn`t so good but it could be a huge step for something bigger .