Review (Some spoilers):
Story - Feels like another generic Amnesia story.
Intro - very sudden, poor grammar first strikes here!
Mapping - Not much detail (except for a few rooms), a lot of areas that don't make sense. A lot of issues, one in particular is use of billboards; they cut through a lot of walls. Some welder issues (especially in the cellar area). Planes we scrunched together, I suggest using plane ties to "space them out". Mapping quality generally seemed to improve as the levels progressed; I found this interesting.
Lighting- Not much contrast or color in the lighting; seems that there are no spotlights/boxlights. In fact, it feels like you didn't use any ambient lights at all; just the natural light that comes off of candles/torches. Lots of light leaking through walls as well.
Scares - Poofers, generic monster+closet encounters, jumpscares (i.e. iron maiden sound effect for no discernible reason)
Spelling/Grammar - At points made it very difficult to understand the story; I'd suggest Sumer's grammar revision services
Puzzles - Well done.
Sounds - Little/no ambient sounds.
Music - Some areas with no music, but good music choices for each area that did have it.
Overall Rating - 3/5, better than many other available custom stories, but there is still plenty of room for improvement. Keep up the good work!
I rate it 3 memes.