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				 (06-25-2013, 11:33 PM)Wapez Wrote:   (06-25-2013, 11:27 PM)ReadingNotAllowed Wrote:  Got some criticism for me?  
 http://i.imgur.com/vQJyEy6.jpg
 
 Cool concept. However... The door doesn't fit in the doorway.
  
LOL! You're right, thanks! ^^
			 
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		| Wapez   Senior Member
 
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				 (06-26-2013, 12:06 AM)ReadingNotAllowed Wrote:   (06-25-2013, 11:33 PM)Wapez Wrote:   (06-25-2013, 11:27 PM)ReadingNotAllowed Wrote:  Got some criticism for me?  
 http://i.imgur.com/vQJyEy6.jpg
 
 Cool concept. However... The door doesn't fit in the doorway.
  LOL! You're right, thanks! ^^
 
I would also add at least one spotlight and turn on "cast shadows" to make it look even more real.
			 
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		| Wapez   Senior Member
 
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				FIRST PICTURE:- Is the bookcases supposed to be turned the wrong way?
 - The floor and walls are very clean. No dust or debris is in the room, even though lots of big rocks are in there.
 - The room is too bright. Remember that there are candles inside those lanterns, not light bulbs.
 
 SECOND PICTURE:
 - Along the exact middle of the stairs, there's a break in the light. There's basically a shadow on the left side of the stair. What is causing the shadow? There's no logic of it being there.
 - The roof looks too bright in comparison to the walls and the other parts of the room.
 
 THIRD PICTURE:
 - The ambient color around the windows throwing the light, and the impact of the light on the wall/barrels, should be more yellowish.
 - The billboards are pointing in the wrong direction. They are pointing to the ground, while the light hits the wall.
 
 Other than that, I like it! Especially the third picture looks cool. Fill it up a bit more and you got a really cool map!
 
 
				
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		| JawlessWarrior   Junior Member
 
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				Hey, hoping I could get some feedback. Not sure if the stairs are illuminated enough and I'm debating putting a thin layer of fog on the floor. (My pc sucks, so billboards and screen resolution are meh...). Its supposed to be fairly dark to contrast the previous area.http://steamcommunity.com/sharedfiles/fi...=156489797 
@The Chaser - those rooms are good templates. Just needs more "stuff" like decals, trash, random entities, etc.; and a bit of light tweaking.
			
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		| The chaser   Posting Freak
 
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				The blue torch you have doesn't affect much the environment, by what I see. It would be good that you made an extra PointLight with a similar but darker colour of the torch, so the torch "made" more light. 
I'd say too that you should add a few dust particles, to make a bit of ambientation (if there are those billboards, which indicate light dust, why not adding "real" dust?
 
My rooms have been updated:
 
Sub-storage room:
http://i.imgur.com/bGUUo2v.jpg 
Stair:
http://i.imgur.com/QXl1P2Y.jpg 
Storage hub:
http://media.moddb.com/cache/images/mods...-08-93.png
                               THE OTHERWORLD (WIP) ![[Image: k6vbdhu]](http://tinyurl.com/k6vbdhu)  
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		| JawlessWarrior   Junior Member
 
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				 (06-29-2013, 08:52 PM)The chaser Wrote:  My rooms have been updated:
 Sub-storage room:
 
 http://i.imgur.com/bGUUo2v.jpg
 
 Stair:
 
 http://i.imgur.com/QXl1P2Y.jpg
 
 Storage hub:
 
 http://media.moddb.com/cache/images/mods...-08-93.png
 
First one looks much better. It looks like there was a recent cave-in or movement around the area. If it wasn't recent, I'd say remove some of the dust as it would have settled by then.
 
Second one is also improved. I think you could lower the chandeliers though, its hard to tell from the angle, but the flames from the candles look a bit too close to the ceiling. Most real life places that I've seen have the chandeliers a bit lower.
 
Third one is awesome so long as all those pillars have a purpose. It's hard to tell, but if there is a reason for them being there it's perfect. The only thing I can nitpick out of it is the transition from a brown wooden pillar (is it stone?) to a white ceiling. Seems out of place. Perhaps if the pillars were aligned with the planks on the ceiling? (This is just nitpicking - it really is an interesting level design and its good as-is). Fill up some of the empty space with boxes or something and I think it would be an awesome area to have a suitor.
			 
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		| The chaser   Posting Freak
 
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				 (06-29-2013, 09:05 PM)JawlessWarrior Wrote:   (06-29-2013, 08:52 PM)The chaser Wrote:  My rooms have been updated:
 Sub-storage room:
 
 http://i.imgur.com/bGUUo2v.jpg
 
 Stair:
 
 http://i.imgur.com/QXl1P2Y.jpg
 
 Storage hub:
 
 http://media.moddb.com/cache/images/mods...-08-93.png
 First one looks much better. It looks like there was a recent cave-in or movement around the area. If it wasn't recent, I'd say remove some of the dust as it would have settled by then.
 
 Second one is also improved. I think you could lower the chandeliers though, its hard to tell from the angle, but the flames from the candles look a bit too close to the ceiling. Most real life places that I've seen have the chandeliers a bit lower.
 
 Third one is awesome so long as all those pillars have a purpose. It's hard to tell, but if there is a reason for them being there it's perfect. The only thing I can nitpick out of it is the transition from a brown wooden pillar (is it stone?) to a white ceiling. Seems out of place. Perhaps if the pillars were aligned with the planks on the ceiling? (This is just nitpicking - it really is an interesting level design and its good as-is). Fill up some of the empty space with boxes or something and I think it would be an awesome area to have a suitor.
 
Wow, didn't realize the transition of wood-white ceiling, thanks for that! I'll add some stuff and I think it will be concluded    
                               THE OTHERWORLD (WIP) ![[Image: k6vbdhu]](http://tinyurl.com/k6vbdhu)  
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